Following the feedback from my
tutor, I have produced what I feel is a much improved and hopefully more ‘professional’
version of my video in response to Paris Photo.
I’ve taken on board most of Jesse’ comments, used some better editing
software – and spent a few more hours on it, of course!
Here’s what I’ve done:
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Purchased
‘VideoPad’, a more versatile piece of video editing software than the ‘freeby’
that I worked with originally, and used elements of the original video to help
me learn my way around it – effectively creating the whole format again, from
scratch.
·
Listened
to the soundtrack again, and come to the conclusion that it works, and that it
provides a good structure around which to re-do the video.
·
Reviewed
all my original images again, making a similar but slightly different
selection, based on the fact that I knew I was working towards this video, as
opposed to the original ‘generic’ selection.
·
Taken
on board many of Jesse’s suggestions, such as:
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Reduce
the number of zooms and be careful about using ‘portrait’ format images (fewer
used, and better control of the way they’re panned in the new version);
§
Don’t
repeat images (only one repeat in this version);
§
Come
up with a better title – hopefully achieved;
§
Deal
with the ‘glitches’ – the new software seems to be much more effective a
generating the video file;
§
Improve
the precision and rhythm – just one quibble here, I wanted to have about eight ‘rapid
fire’ images at towards the end, but even the new software couldn’t handle it;
§
Incorporate
some other images and pick up on some of his cropping/zooming suggestions.
·
To
help plan the new version, I printed all the selected images at 2”x3”, cut them
up and arranged into a narrative sequence that worked best with the soundtrack.
·
I
left that new version for a few days (whilst I was away in London, during
March) and came back to it ‘cold’.
Whilst happy that it was an improvement, I felt it need a stronger start
– recalling the message from Peter Rudge at the Leeds Workshop and the need to
get the viewer’s attention in the first few seconds – and perhaps a cleverer
ending.
·
Another
piece of advice from Jesse was to look at some of the experimental videos on
Vimeo. There are a lot, and a very
varied bunch, but it was the avant-garde category that most caught my
attention; and I guess my own video might, loosely, fall into that category.
·
Since
then, I‘ve been quite busy and it has nagged away in the back of my mind. I’ve even occasionally been tempted, once
again, to abandon the whole thing.
However, it is now ‘topped and tailed’ in a way that I think works
successfully. The three images at the
start, with the short soundclip (downloaded, free of charge) do have a bit of
an avant-garde influence, reflecting the Vimeo research. The ending could be a touch ‘Monty Python’,
perhaps even a bit ‘naff’, but Jesse did comment on the irreverence of my
approach and I think the ending maintains that.
So, the new version is available on
YouTube & is being shared with my tutor.
I’ve had enough of it for the time being. I’m reasonably happy with it; certainly think
it is a vast improvement on the original; and will now press on to other
things, perhaps revisiting again when Assessment time approaches. But, any comments and suggestions will be
gratefully received and stored away until then
Is there a higher resolution version Stan? This small object is too small to make meaningful comments (it could just be my eyes!) and when I increase the size to fill the screen it falls apart visually.
ReplyDeleteThere is now - try it again & it should be OK full-screen.
ReplyDeleteThat's much better! I still like it a lot and the 'house of cards' at the end is, as Jesse comments, a 'nice' comment on the subject matter!
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